Tink--

This doesn't look too much improved over the first version, but that version was quite good, so who cares?

The second chorus seems a bit long, and on second read, "When the sun breaks through the night" sounds slilted-- do you really talk that way to kids?-- and her asking what little kids are made of seems too much out of the blue.

This is a really nice song, especially the first verse and chorus. I'm okay with "tippy toe kiss" now too because I see it flows right through with the story in that first chorus.

Good luck with this song!

Posted on Dec 1, 2000, 5:02 PM
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